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Read between the lines.
Can't you see it's not alright?
It's all messed up.
But still I fight.
'Cause If I don't.
Then I've quit my life.
I fight alone.
No one beside me.
'Cept my shadow.
Who still deprives me.
All I want.
Is to be free.
To know that God.
Hasn't quit on me.
©2005-2009 ~matthurst
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Lately I've just had the urge to write poetry. Maybe to tell a story I can't say in the norm. Oh well, here it is.

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:iconmisstressskitzy:
I like the last few lines, but the first few confuse me a little bit. The problem is that there are so many poems like this on deviantart, and you really need to try and think of a way to express yourself rather than just this way, as its so common. Although not bad I think you should think about using metaphors and things as it makes your poetry stand out. ;)

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